Overdue - my first short film

FreakMullet

Shared on Fri, 12/08/2006 - 12:04

so check it out, the movie that I've been working on for school over the last 2.5 months is finally done. :D let me know what you all think. :)

[youtube]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=n-jsma34aRI[/youtube]

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FreakMullet's picture
Submitted by FreakMullet on Fri, 12/08/2006 - 18:30
to grim -> yea, the title is revealing but we just couldn't think of anything else. :) to proving -> yea, we wanted the gun there (btw, it was only a BB gun ;) ) to throw people off. kinda like, Willy lives in an alternate universe where librarians have guns and stuff. :D
webmonkee's picture
Submitted by webmonkee on Mon, 12/11/2006 - 19:17
Very nice! I liked the drama buildup of reaching into his vest pocket. I kinda knew it was about a book by then, but I was wondering what the heck he was gonna pull out!
Dadditude's picture
Submitted by Dadditude on Tue, 06/19/2007 - 17:05
Not too shabby - I really enjoyed it and look forward to seeing your future work.
Q0047's picture
Submitted by Q0047 on Fri, 12/08/2006 - 12:35
Nicely done! Solid cinematography, smooth scene transitions, and Warren "El Guapo" Shebly is a strong, smooth, convincing main character. I also like his selection of pimp canes!
wareaglebeene1's picture
Submitted by wareaglebeene1 on Fri, 12/08/2006 - 13:07
I liked it too. You did a good joob. "Catch my death" statement was a little out of place for the setup. Just that little phrase was distracting from the film because I was thinking "who still says that?". Also, the title might be too revealing. I knew he was going to collect a book from the beginning. The title automatically makes your mind go there and even more so with his use of the word. However, if the title was different I would not have given such notice to the actor saying it and would have been more surprised at the end.
MrwhiteII's picture
Submitted by MrwhiteII on Fri, 12/08/2006 - 13:09
Very impressive. I definitely did not see the ending coming until the last few seconds...The dialogue between the gentlemen on the street corner is reminiscent of banter between Jay and Silent Bob.
ProvingUnique's picture
Submitted by ProvingUnique on Fri, 12/08/2006 - 13:20
Only towards the end was i thinking of collecting a book,.. but i thought no way he had a handgun on the table in the beginning... the gun kinda threw me off.

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